Sentence 11

His sentence:

In the towns, on the edges of the towns, in field, in vacant lots, the used-car yards, the wreckers' yards, the garages with blazoned signs- Used Cars, Good Used Cars.
by John Steinbeck in The Grapes of Wrath

This rhetorical fragment takes the reader through a vivid description and describes the scene and the chaos in one sentence.

My sentence:

In the corners, on the floor of the room, in the hamper, on any surface, the papers, the clutter, the laundry with a oder- sweat, old sweat.